I will attach my research paper and I need to base it on my research paper separate into 4 parts in 4 different papers because I have to turn in 4 parts differently and then the whole research at the end. I already try to submit part 1 which is Intro but I need to revise I will also attach the one I submitted and the comment from my professor for you easy to compare. Last but not least please take a look at the whole paper and fix it if you think the paper should change something !!
#2: Literature Review (Part 1)
#3: Literature Review (Part 2)
#4: Conclusion and Policy Implications
P/S: this is the comment from professor
Thanks for your submission. This looks to be an interesting research paper.
An introduction should not have graphs in it. Rather, you should be introducing the topic, providing background on the problem, and introducing your thesis — all in your own writing.
LATER ON, in the body of your paper, you will support your thesis with peer reviewed studies conducted by others — but this does not belong in your intro.
Please revise this assignment as follows:
1) Remove all graphs.
2) Add a title page in APA format (this submission in not in APA… missing page numbers).
3) Remember, this in your INTRODUCTION — it is not the body of the paper.
4) Put it into paragraphs without all the bold headers — there should only be ONE header in your introduction, and that header is “Introduction”. For example, your thesis statement should be appropriately placed in a paragraph, near the end of your introduction — not separated out with a header. Same goes for the statement of the problem, etc. Just integrate all of those ideas into paragraphs.
I look forward to receiving your revised introduction!